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Pecan, holding back laughter: Do you think he might be trolling us-
Badger: I WILL SEND YOU STRAIGHT TO HELL MYSELF
—Redo Notes— (Possible spoilers for new readers!)
Comparison Page Managed to condense these two pages! I think I improved the dialogue a lot from the original, the old just seemed so off and jilted. Also I think it’s more clear that Aksel’s a big fucking dude, especially compared to everyone else.
Also I can picture Pecan being that friend that would spam all their friends with the Trololol video
Poor Rin looks so distraught and after reading the story up through where you have it--now I want to give her a big hug while I go cry ;_;